The Searing Serpents’ Submersion

[Boots]

A jagged knife
Cutting into the cool air
Thrusting feverishly against pale perplexity
And with ferocity
Pulsating rhythmically
The dancers collapse only when

The dull dam bursts
Initiating the inundation
Tormenting the torrents
Triggering a tirade
A mighty monsoon of mouths
Whose stabbing tongues storm down

Never to falter
But to abate the blaze
To extinguish the embers


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Another poem I wrote for my poetry workshop, rated M. :tease: I'm really satisfied with this one.

What do you think?

[Tome]

I like it. I can't really say beyond that, because I don't really understand it. I just sort of read it quickly, though. I'll see if I can find time to look again later tonight.

[Meathos]

lolsex.

It's good. Imagery is effective, it flows well. I like it.

[Boots]

I like it. I can't really say beyond that, because I don't really understand it. I just sort of read it quickly, though. I'll see if I can find time to look again later tonight.
Thanks for reading both of you. :link:

I'm sure you'll see it clearer next read-around Tome.

I wrote it and then realized all the sex in it after.

[Victoria]

lolsex indeed. Heh, I liked that.