But You Left Me

[Krazy Koco King]

But You Left Me
A Kylsos Lament



I loved you so,
I broke my oaths
Of Druid decree;
I gave my heart
To you in love
But you left me.

What other option
Could there be
For me to see?
You vanish for months,
What could I think
But that you left me?

Never again shall I
Bare open my heart
Only to be stabbed.

I praised you endlessly
You, more beautiful
Than the sun and sea;
I would have followed you
To the ends of the earth
And yet you left me.

I fought perils
And risked all
So our love might be;
Yet now it's I
Who dies inside
Because you left me.

All this I did for you;
But in the end
'Twas you who left me.



(Yes, I did write that completely on the spur of the moment. This is the first draft. Thus it might not be as good as what I could do.

Say what you think! Constructive criticism welcome. As long as it's constructive and not all-out bashing.)

[Northern Lights]

I liked it actually.

You write often?

[Krazy Koco King]

Yes. Although poems are not my strength, I write a few here and there. My specialty lies more in prose, especially novels.

[Mattieau]

hey Krazy, would you mind if i put that in another site, id like to share it with my friends.

[Sean Connery]

Well thats a punch in the balls for me.

[Krazy Koco King]

hey Krazy, would you mind if i put that in another site, id like to share it with my friends.

You could if you want, but I'm not sure they would understand it. You really have to know who Kylsos and Kaitlyn are, and what happened to get them together (i.e. that thread trilogy) and how Ace disappeared recently. If you think your friends would understand, or if you explained it a little in a footnote, it'd be all right...

Or were you being sarcastic?

[Northern Lights]

I don't know Kylsos and Kaitlyn, but I still appreciated it.

[Zen/Sin]

Way to make me feel bad! I stumbled upon this site again after i was looking at the other forums i was on. I had forgotten my pasword and stuff, but i gots it back!

HI EVERYBODY!

[Krazy Koco King]

Holy. Freakin. Crap.

Right when I wrote the whole lament doodizzle, you come back. Such great timing.

Oh well. Good to see ya back.

[Zen/Sin]

Camp. Bad computer, lotsa rain, and i forgot about this site, (i'm on like, twenty different RP sites).

I stumbled across it while i was looking for cheats and i remembered i was a member.

[Krazy Koco King]

It's all right. I've been at about twenty total too, but most of them die or get boring, so I really only have three that are running smoothly. Part of the time I get too busy for so many and, like I said before, part of the time the site dies or gets boring. :-/

[Zen/Sin]

Yeah, well, i'm back for... Well, until my ADD kicks in again

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