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Hermes
October 13th, 2006, 05:12 PM
The crowd is on the edge of their seats since the start of the show and is waiting in anticipation.

Hey!
Hey!
Hey!
Nothing you can say
Nothings gonna change what you’ve done to me
Now its time to shine
I’m gonna take what’s mine
Take what’s mine

Mercy Drive blares on the speakers and out walks a new face to PWW, Rene Pierre. He cockily makes his way to the ring, as if he can’t hear the boos.

Rene Pierre
Hello, hello, PWW!

Boos from the crowd.

Pierre
Looking a little angry.
Oh yeah! This is America; I’ll tone down my smarts to your level.
He smirks.
Yo, Yo, Yo, homeskillets! G DAWG!

More Boos from the crowd. Some clever chants making fun of rap can be heard.

Pierre
Okay enough of that, I’m starting to feel like bustin’ a cap.
He laughs.
Wow. Owners told me this was the place to test my ability. All I see is a bunch of fat ass women and their ugly stupid American boy friends.

Chants of “Atleast They Shave” can be heard.

Pierre
As I was walking in the back, I realized I have no competition here.

Boos.

Pierre
I walked past their lockerooms and looked them in the eye and you know what I saw? I saw fear. I saw little petty American douche bags looking at me like I was death itself. I saw the fear in all their eyes……. And I liked it.

He laughs and leaves the ring.

(finish)

VashTheStampede
October 13th, 2006, 06:07 PM
Yo, Yo, Yo, homeskillets! G DAWG!

Hmm.

Considering I just banned a flame account called GDawg101...and he shared an IP with you and only you...

Yeah, I'm gonna consider that a banning of you, and you're one step closer to BoS.

XZ
October 13th, 2006, 07:08 PM
um...very short..
also, you didn't really go into much detail...and there was no body (Main part, or...filler..w/e.)
It was meh..ok.

The-Joker
October 13th, 2006, 08:05 PM
Hmm.

Considering I just banned a flame account called GDawg101...and he shared an IP with you and only you...

Yeah, I'm gonna consider that a banning of you, and you're one step closer to BoS.

Of course for cutting a promo like this, he should have been banned anyway.

Er, nonspam constructive criticism

You never established where your guy is from, the spelling and grammar hurt to read.
There isn't much dialogue, and what there is is pretty generic.

Also, these are just preferences, but you should bold your colored text and I recommend against using music that established real life wrestlers use.