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$ean
October 9th, 2006, 10:54 AM
Fresh off of a match, we are taken to a pre taped vignette. Rich Storrs is sitting in a chair in the middle of the ring. It is completely dark except for a green spotlight shining directly on him. He slowly lifts his head to look at the camera. Once he sees the camera, he shows a shifty grin.

My name is Rich Storrs. And while I’m passionate about my money and investments, I’m even more passionate about wrestling. I have always dreamed of being a professional wrestler. After years of rigorous weight training and MMA training, I’m finally ready for the big time.

Rich gets out of the chair and paces several times in the ring. Then, he bounces off the ropes as he runs from one side of the ring to the other. He comes to a stop in the middle of the ring.

All my life, I lived in a mansion. But my real home is here in this ring. When I’m standing in this ring, I feel more powerful then I already am. And when I pin my opponent 1-2-3, it calls for a celebration.

Rich pulls a twenty-dollar bill out of one pocket, and a Cuban cigar and a match out of the other. He lights the twenty-dollar bill with the match and the cigar with the now burning twenty. He takes in a large puff of smoke, then lets the smoke poor out of his mouth slowly.

The entire PWW roster better watch out. When they step in the ring with me, they’re asking for a grade A ass kicking. I don’t fool around in this ring. I will win, and I will make it to the top.

Rich exits the ring and walks around at ringside. He stops, leans on the barricade wall, and stares at the empty arena seats.

And when I look down at all of those middle class people paying to see me straight off of the win, I’ll tell them… You Can Bank On That.

Dean
October 11th, 2006, 12:53 PM
But... that's a Cuban cigar! That's illegal!

Oh, and that whole money-burning thing too, heh.

I liked this one, man. You've got a lot of potential. I see some spelling errors, but overall, you're one of the best prospects I've seen for only his SECOND role-play EVER. Good job.

$ean
October 11th, 2006, 01:40 PM
Thanks alot Dean. I had to put some thought into this one. And I did type it on Microsoft word before I posted it. Probably just wrong uses of some words.

Dean
October 11th, 2006, 01:43 PM
Yeah, the main one that sticks out is "strait" instead of "straight."

The-Joker
October 11th, 2006, 02:41 PM
This is alot more polished and alot better than the last RP. I liked the money burning thing as well, but I still feel like the character is a tad generic. We've seen the rich guy gimmick alot of times before. Try and find yourself a niche.

It's still pretty solid and you seem to know where you character is coming from. That's always important.

Dean
October 11th, 2006, 02:44 PM
I actually disagree on that, Faust. I think he is being a bit generic with the rich guy gimmick, because he isn't a BLATANT heel or anything. He's just a guy with the sufficient funds to get the best training possible to become the best wrestler in the world. It's a bit more unique than you give it credit for, I think.