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View Full Version : "I'm here to save the day." - Crimson Hawk at TFIN


Barack Obama
September 30th, 2006, 10:52 AM
We're backstage now inside the locker room of the Crimson Hawk. His head is down, he is obviously upset about his loss to Nicolas Smirnov at Revival. He looks up, and speaks.

Crimson Hawk
At Revival, Nicolas Smirnov triumphed over myself, and Michael Haynes. Of course, I was not the one who was pinned, but nevertheless I failed. My mission in this world is to stop guys like that from achieving their goals, because at heart, they are corrupt. They are filthy. They are not good men. Smirnov is the epitome of what I want to put an end to, and yet, he thrives in this business thus far. It's alright, though, because in the end everything works out. I will put an end to him sooner or later, but not tonight, not right now. No, instead, I have a match against Michael Haynes. This cocky, arrogant bastard, thinks he has what it takes to take me down. I have put Smirnov aside for now, because I heard some harsh words earlier, and I need to see to it that the consequences of those words are felt.

Hawk pauses for a bit, and then speaks.

Crimson Hawk
You think I'm a joke, Michael? You think that I'm nothing? It's true, I may not have any real super powers, but it's the thought that counts. It's the idea, that I can protect everyone from your awful stench, to inflict pain upon those who think they are better than the law. Michael Haynes, if you think you're perfect, then tonight the hawk will fly down into your world. I have no choice but to beat into you some reality, which is that you are nothing. So let your spidey senses tingle, Michae Haynes, because I'm here to save the day.

Cut to ringside.

OOC: Obviously not as much effort was put into this as my other promo, but I do have places to go, and people to see. And what I did should be good enough, anyway.

Dean
September 30th, 2006, 10:59 AM
Hmm, yeah, it wasn't bad or anything, I guess. You might want to cut the profanity out (bastard(s)) and make it more kid-friendly, I guess.

And it looks pretty rushed grammar-wise.

Also, You didn't need to add the last line to your OOC comment, lol. That doesn't exactly motivate anyone to give a crap about the character. :P